Ruth Cupcake
201 Kings Road Arches
Brighton BN1
Great Britain
4th December 2008
201 Kings Road Arches
Brighton BN1
Great Britain
4th December 2008
RTL Television GmbH
Bachweg. 10a
50858 Köln
Dear Anke Schäferkordt,
Complaint about women in RTL adverts
Since some weeks I am noticing a negative trend of showing a wrong ideal of women in your commercials which is the reason for my letter. I think that you show women in your adverts whereby the audience becomes a wrong ideal of women.
Because of my job there isn’t much time left for watching TV, but when I turn it on I notice that your channel has many adverts in which the wrong kind of women are presented. Those women who are allowed to appear in your commercials look like the often discussed models in the fashion industry. They all are young, often look anorexic, and their look is perfect, even if they are cleaning a house in the adverts. In my opinion the society is influenced by such commercials and that’s one reason why especially men, but also women, think that a woman should look anorexic and should wear high-heels while doing the laundry.
Therefore I hope that these commercials, which are very sexist, are banned because that could be a way to put the ideal of women in perspective. The real woman or housewife should be shown.
Sincerely yours,
R. Cupcake
1 comment:
Werbung im Fernsehen: commercial
since + point in time / for + period of time --> present perfect!
comma with relative clauses!
you show woman in a way that sends out the wrong message to ... (your version sounds complicated and is difficult to understand)
society: generic noun - no article!! (but: the society of Austria ...)
expression: "because that could be a way to put the ideal of women in perspective."
a realistic housewife or woman
The argumentation is clear on the whole and there is an example. You could work on this a bit more to make the letter is more convincing. You try to raise the level of your English but here it sounds a bit odd at times and partly it's wrong.
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